Trust
The walls are white and he stands by the door while much is thought but very little said and as it has been many times before the sterile mask is brought up to the bed. Attempts are made, but no...
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Hello V You've problems with some imperfect end rhymes here dis-ab-led and the-table; stand <> hands The walls are white and he stands by the door Perhaps 'as he stood by the door':...
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Thanks for your comments Jack, much appreciated. I'll have another look at it with them in mind.
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Hello again V You should/could get many different interpretations of this piece. And in its seeming simplicity, the use of filler words needs to be addressed and focussed more concisely to avoid their...
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This is quite a powerful picture, and I like your concluding couplet quite a lot. Even with the title, I wasn't expect exactly that - I was thinking the poem might be going into how trust was broken...
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